Your menu is very nice. Maybe in ME2 we will see something similar. Alas, my knowledge of English ends there, sorry.
Fix'd 4 ya.
Dunno, looks nice in the very beginning, but once the cam pans over the single roof it becomes boring. The whole idea of the original menu is to show you the skyline of the City in all it's whiteness. Now if you could somehow replace it with just the background night city without focusing exclusively on one roof, that would be much better. Still not all-white and clean like the original, but at least just as dramatic.